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Steel and hardware
Made it through
(We'd be nowhere without you)

You gave us life
You fought like hell
(all your secrets, you'd never tell)

And steel and hardware
Made it through
Our hearts and minds
They made it too
No matter where your pieces go
You're a hero
(this I know)

So fight it hard
Your broken bones
The sacrifice
Left in our homes
Men and women
Have died right here
their photographs,
You kept them near

But here it goes,
Our final run
(of all of them
this is the one)

Should I, and we,
And humans fall
You were our love
So say we all.
This is, in all seriousness, a love poem to a starship.

I'm on the last two episodes of Battlestar Galactica and I gotta tell you, I have never been so sad to see a character fall apart and fail as I was to see Galactica breaking down. Anyone else watched the series? those people I hope are the ones most likely to appreciate/understand the poem x) Likely go to scraps or just outright be gone pretty quick- just had to write something, you know? For just being a piece of metal, I fracking loved that ship.

Comment for Scifi group here: [link] on ~StuntPilotin's piece "And Screamed"


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Relativity I'll go a thousand miles a second
and fade away before the sun has reached its height.
There's no return planned,
and I'm so sure, so sure,
that there will be none.

I'll be three days older when you die
(of a heart attack, or something worse.)
It's too long a time for me to imagine
that they'll find a cure.
("We don't forget our own")
Your grandchildren do.

I'd like to say I'm giving you a second chance
but this is not a gift (not now, but it will be)
Our babies understand (they will, they will)

And so I was the shadow, the power, the reason
that everything came true.
I am the secret that made heroes great
and I was the o
Petra cry on my shoulder,
or give me a reason not to
let you
invade me, find your new home

i am just empty land
and your touch, my dear,
your touch could just
be the empire i need.
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Ard0R0us Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I think sci-fi poetry is an under-served and usually under-appreciated niche. Thank you for creating a unique and memorable work. I think the brevity and simplicity of the wording helps the raw emotion show through in a particularly powerful way. The fact that it's a poem with a specific timeliness to it, to me, elevates this beyond the basic laudatory form. I know designers, engineers, and technicians sometimes leave graffiti or small artifacts to memorialize their presence, (like a welder tacking a metal figurine of Hephaestus to a bridge as a protective totem) I could see something like this scratch-awled on the inside of an access panel, or better yet out in the open for other shipmates to appreciate. If found later it would be a treasured artifact. As it stands it's a treasure in it's own right. Good job.
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mousefur202 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2011
This is a great poem :D Love Battle Star Galactica! So say we all!
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rmj7 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011
Well, I for one have seen the series (EPIC EPICNESS), so I COMPLETELY understand what every line meant. Holy crap, this poem is . . . wow! And that final line, sigh. Perfect, absolutely perfect. Brilliantly crafted. This poem speaks on every level the feelings that one probably felt as they watched those final episodes of BSG. Well done. Well done, indeed.
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creativelycliche Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Professional Writer
I am so glad that someone who has seen the series finally read this (= I feel like 90% of the emotion from it is missed if you haven't felt it yourself. And thank you so much! It was indeed a very emotional part of the series, and I am flag that a fellow BSG fan appreciates my attempt at conveying that (=
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mackyster Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2010   Photographer
havn't seen it but i love this piece =D
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foreveryourdreamer Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2010
You're (dead seriously) the only guy I know who is still fascinated by outer space and Battlestar Galactica, etc. :) So, while I cannot really appreciate the subject, I do like the poem because it made me smile. Keep being yourself. You're special and interesting, and your science fiction writings will make it big someday.
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creativelycliche Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2010  Professional Writer
That's almost sad to em that I am the only guy you know into that stuff D=

I hope I do well with it. I want to see a science fiction revival. No more vampires or wizards, let's see some aliens! (I've got nothing against Harry Potter or... All right, I do have something against Twilight xD)

I just like science fiction quite a bit and am tired of the horror movies. Sci-Fi can be just as good as any old Fantasy book or movie, it just needs to be done right. (=
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foreveryourdreamer Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2010
:D Right. I agree with you. I am totally fascinated by aliens... just not everything else. Ever seen Dr. Who?
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creativelycliche Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2010  Professional Writer
I have not- it is on my list of sci-fi to see... After various Stargate stuff and Caprica (=
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foreveryourdreamer Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2010
:) Seen it. Caprica I mean.

I used to be pretty big into sci-fi. It was after the teasing that I stopped liking it so much. And the fact that I started to hate science..
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